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I would like to announce that Paleolithics game is available on the App Store
App Store Link: http://itunes.apple.com/us/app/paleolithics/id408490937
Official Website: http://paleolithics.instantgames.com.br/
Here's a game play video:
This game was develop using the 0.99.1 version of cocos2d-iPhone, and coincidence or not it's selling for U$ 0,99 ;)
I'm looking at the site right now. Did you pay somebody where english is their first language? If, so they did a poor job.
This one is from a game screenshot:
"When it reach this place is time to hammer the cristals". Cristals should be "crystals" and the entire phrase should be reworded. Something like "Hammer the crystals when the target reaches this point.".
spelling errors on the site that I can see:
Man:
He's the father of the Paleolithic family. Very brave, can face any danger to collect Materials.
He has a dream of exploring the whole planet, but this ain't gonna be so easy!Should be:
He's the father of the Paleolithic family. He is very brave and can face any danger to gather Materials.
He has always dreamed of exploring the whole planet, but this is not going be easy!Boy:
This boy wants really much to be just like his father, and he loves to hunt.
He might not be as strong as his father, but he do knows how to use long range Weapons such as Bows and Boomerangs.Should be:
This boy wants to be just like his father, and he loves to hunt.
He might not be as strong as his father, but he knows how to use long range weapons such as Bows and Boomerangs.Elder:
The Elder is the oldest member of the Tribe. Wise and philosofic, he likes to give advices to anyone.
He wishes to find out why the animals are so angry. Do you think you can help ?Should be:
The Elder is the oldest member of the Tribe. Wise and philosophical, he likes to give advice to anyone.
He wishes to find out why the animals have become angry. Do you think you can help?Blacksmith:
It's the Blacksmith who provides the Equipments and Itens to the Store.
As he is very strong, the Tribe people think that he might be the Hero that was mentioned on the prophecy. Whould that be so?Should be:
It's the Blacksmith who provides the Equipment and Items to the Store.
As he is very strong, the Tribe people think that he may be the hero who was mentioned in the prophecy.Owner:
The Store's Owner is an really happy and full of life woman. A little distracted however, always losing her keys...
The Store has many Equipments and Itens that you can trade with the Materials you have found.Should be:
The Store's Owner is a really happy woman who is full of life. She can be a little distracted however and always loses her keys.
The Store has plenty of Equipment and Items that you can buy with the Materials you have gathered.History:
Help the Paleolithic people to face fierce animals, collect Materials and make the first humanity tools.
Paleolithics for iPhone is a fun, addictive and full of surprises game.Should be:
Help the Paleolithic people to face fierce animals, gather Materials and make the first tools that humanity has ever seen.
Paleolithics for iPhone is a fun, addictive game that is full of surprises.Very original idea, congrats!
Yeah, even in the game the translations aren't very good.
Before: Hi, I wanted really much to open my store, but I lost my key.
After: Hi, I really wanted to open my store, but I lost my key.
Before: Use your finger to command them to defend theirselves.
After: Use your finger to command them to defend themselves.
Before: Collect the materials and use them to buy equipments on the store.
After: Collect the materials and use them to buy equipment in the store.
Before: On the store you can trade materials for new equipments and itens.
After: In the store you can trade materials for new equipment and items.
Before: Find more materials playing many times the same scene!
After: Find more materials by playing the same scene multiple times!
Before: Thanks for helping us finding the key.
After: Thank you for helping us find the key.
Before: Why don't you go to the store? The owner wish to talk to you.
After: Why don't you go to the store? The owner wishes to talk to you.
Before: Please, get in and make yourself at home!
After: Please, come in and make yourself at home!
Okay, just typing the "After" now...
The tribe people left some equipment and items here to exchange for materials.
As you helped me find my key, I'll give you a shield for free.
If you aren't sure how to use it, talk to the elder. He'll show you how.
The items can only be used once. If you try to take them to another stage, you'll lose them. (Wasn't 100% clear on the second sentence.)
If you don't want to collect materials by yourself, I can sell them to you for only 99 cents.
I played the game past the first boss. Let me just say, when I first saw the screenshots it looked kind of cheap. I'm being honest. But then I viewed the video and thought it looked neat. Now that I played - all I can say is EXCELLENT! The graphics in the game are very nice and colorful - especially the backgrounds during the journeys. All the graphics are light and refreshing and the game is fun. My 7 year old really likes it too.
The shop is a little confusing - I'm not even sure how much materials I have to buy stuff. But at least it tells me I need more if I don't enough.
I like all the cocos2d nuances and other neat things you did in the game. I hope users don't jump to any conclusions at first glance of the graphics because they are missing out on a fun game. Leaving a review now.
Item is often misspelled Iten
More fixes:
How about we equip that shield you won?
Feel free to use my house, but don't mess around, ok?
Your trophies are on the shelf. Let's take a look.
Here you can see information about each trophy you've won.
Now feel free to look around. I'll be outside if you need me.
Hi there @jd, thanks for your nice words.
In fact, you don't have to buy ANY materials to beat the game. You just have to gather them on the stages (as it's written on the lower side of the materials window tab). But if you really really wants to jump right to the game end you can buy some of them. You know, some of them are very rare (you can get them only at higher stage levels) and you have the "diurnal"/"nocturnal" materials too (did you notice?)
You have many surprises until you reach the last stage, a nice history and game end. Something very annoying to us is that almost all iPhone games don't have a game end. I have beat the Battleheart game to see a "Thanks" screen :/
Hey @FogleBird, many thanks !
I did notice that make game text revisions WITHOUT playing the game doesn't work properly... Our proofreader ended up leaving things out of context, but next time we will "kidnap her" lol.
Why don't we create a section in the forum where we can ask for translations and corrections?
I know we have this http://www.cocos2d-iphone.org/wiki/doku.php/resources:translations
but we might need more!
by the way I can help peolpe who need translation/corrections in italian
Benihana
Member
I can't translate, but if you've got a page or less of proofreading, I don't mind helping out. If the translator's first language is the language that's getting translated FROM, it's understandable that some of the phrasing would be odd to a natural speaker of that language. And if you need more than a page proofread, you should probably be paying someone. ;d
@MandarX, good idea! I am certainly one who really could use that... hehe...
And the game looks unique! Like it! I agree that the screenshots doesnt do the game justice. I will not say what I first thought when I saw the screenshot, but when I saw the video - yeah, that changes everything. Well done.
Very nice game. The graphics are great, the game is very polished and original. Congratulations!
I know we have this http://www.cocos2d-iphone.org/wiki/doku.php/resources:translations
but we might need more!
lol, I didn't know that page existed. Time to have another trawl through the wiki and see what else I'm missing.
btw: I'm a native english speaker but born in Yorkshire (Up North) so probably of no use to anybody when it comes to translation ;)
Hi there everyone,
Lite versions is available now:
http://itunes.apple.com/app/paleolithics-lite/id426615750
To celebrate Instant Game's birthday, this game will be free for a week ;)
Please share!
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